Friday, 30 September 2016

Corridor


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‘I ran into that corridor! Did I make a mistake?’

‘What did you see?’

‘It was gorgeous Daddy! Magnificent! There were lights and doors. And the floor was shining like a... mirror... so clean! I loved it...! Can we live in that corridor, daddy? It had so many doors; can’t we use just one?’

‘It’s not ours, sweetheart. We work here, do all the chores... we can’t live here!’

‘If we do everything here, then why not live? You clean it so good, daddy!’

Poor man’s lone eyes escaped a tear as he narrated the harsh inequalities of the world!

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This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 30th September 2016.

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  1. Interesting story.Inequalities of quality health and education is a sad reality

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  2. Short and to the point Geet ..good one :)

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    1. Thanks a ton, Deepa! Always a pleasure to hear from you!

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  3. You nailed it, Geeta. The innocent of a child not attuned to the harsh reality of life. It sad. It pierces the heart. The ruthless inequality of life!

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  4. Sad but true . A truth that exists in the mist egalitarian societies

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    1. Exactly! Everything is there in papers, in talks but in reality, it's not even close!

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  5. oh.. too good. It's really difficult to teach harsh realities to innocent minds.

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    1. Specially, in times as today, children sure need to learn it soon!

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  6. The innocence of the child and the pain of the father is so well brought out here. Nicely done Geetika :)

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    1. Thank you Reema :) i'm glad you liked it!

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  7. Children in fact voice everything they feel and that is what makes them special. The harshness of the situation is like hitting on the face...Menaka Bharathi has recently published

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    1. More than the child, it's the father who is sad, who doesn't want the innocence of the child to go right away!

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  8. That's so real and true. Well written, Geetika.

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  9. Fascinating dystopia future. I found myself picturing some future world where all that's left is storage units and the poor live outside in tents or crumbling shacks. I could see a novel here but also works great as a standalone. Very well written.
    Anne from annehiga.com

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